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I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying my sentence beginnings and using descriptive language.

Use a variety of sentence beginnings

Use punctuation

Add adjectives and verbs

Use a variety of sentence lengths

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Beep beep. “Ahh.” I groaned still lying in bed. “I can’t be bothered getting out.” Slowly I rolled out of bed and hit the hard floor. I quickly ran to the warm shower and spent a long time in there. Eventually I get out of the shower and head down stairs. Suddenly I get a waft of a delicious smell. Then I remember it was my brothers birthday,

then I saw them, the delicious looking pancakes smothered in whipped cream and golden syrup. I said to myself, how could I eat something so good looking. But you know, I did.