Sick sentences

1. It was a cold Day/ The creatures went through the water.

     ‘Splosh slash’ as the whales swiftly glide through the bitter water in the freezing thin air.

2. They stuck together

They stuck together as if they were family

3.Sam and the skydivers held on to each other.

Scardly Sam gripped onto Ronald’s arm with his life.  

4. They were high up.

Scardly Sam gripped onto Ronald’s arm with his life.  

5. It was scary.

Pulse rushing like there’s no tomorrow screaming for dear life the skydivers were all terrified.

6. The rider held on.

His speedy motorbike was zooming as quick as it could go on the hard stony ground.

7. His bike was going quickly over the ground.

The hard rocky ground was filthy and was as dusty as an old shelf.

8. It was really dusty. He felt excited and scared.

Swiftly the rider rode his huge motorbike down the rocky ground, excitedly but scared  he rode over a hill.

    

    

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My Popplet

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Becoming the statue of liberty!!

I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying ny sentence beginnings and using descriptive language.

 

Use punctuation

Add adjectives and verbs

Use a variety of sentence lengths .

Selfie Writing 1st Draft - Paige

Becoming the statue of liberty

Hey,  guess what? I am the new statue of liberty. Great right? I think there are awesome changes, like now I have a crown I feel like the queen of England!! I feel great, normally I feel sick but not this time!!

I can see everything, like people walking down the street, cars going through  red lights.  You know what, I yell at them  at the top of my stoney lungs,  watch it fools.

The weird thing is I was walking along the street of New York City, and all of a sudden “poof!” I was high up in the sky.

What I think happened was I was walking down the street, then a wizard, with his long beard, came out of nowhere and shot me with his magical wand. That is what I think happened anyway.

You know I could be wrong. Who knows?  I don’t really care because this is my dream.  My  arms are going to get sore after a while,  my eyes are going to sting from all the flashing lights of the cameras, but it’s  worth it!  I don’t know if I will wake up and I will be back to normal. Or I’ll  be stuck up here forever.

By Paige

Yum!!

I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying my sentence beginnings and using descriptive language.

Use a variety of sentence beginnings

Use punctuation

Add adjectives and verbs

Use a variety of sentence lengths

Yum!!

Beep beep. “Ahh.” I groaned still lying in bed. “I can’t be bothered getting out.” Slowly I rolled out of bed and hit the hard floor. I quickly ran to the warm shower and spent a long time in there. Eventually I get out of the shower and head down stairs. Suddenly I get a waft of a delicious smell. Then I remember it was my brothers birthday,

then I saw them, the delicious looking pancakes smothered in whipped cream and golden syrup. I said to myself, how could I eat something so good looking. But you know, I did.